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Uncategorized Boards => Website "Chat" Help => Topic started by: Dave on July 01, 2008, 04:52:59 AM
Yesterday I helped a friend get a web site together Simon's Amazing magic (//http://www.simonsamazingmagic.co.uk/) using mr site (//http://www.mrsite.com/) would love to know your thoughts?
Hi Dave, nice & clean. I've seen some sites that take forever to load. :idea: One thought though (forgive me I can't remember what it's called) when you click on the different page links on the left, if you have a look where you type in the web page address's, you dont have the corresponding name of page. Instead there are page numbers. I understand that to be important if he/you want it to get picked up by the search engines.
Hope this helps.
Good job.
Steve
Looks good Dave - well done
One small observation - on the 'Close up Magic' page there is a spelling mistake - 'corporate' is mis-spelt
Dave,
Could you get some pictures of Simon working at events (action shots) rather than the his garden & front room?
Looks good to me Dave - the problems I found are spelling related - my favourite topic!
Under Children's Parties section - its says "staring role" instead of "starring role" unless of course the childs role is to stand there ad stare at everyone!
Under close up magic
It says "performes" instead of "performs"
"resturants" instead of "restaurants"
"corperate" instead of "corporate"
Under the last section an apostrophe has been missed - twice it says "childrens" instead of "children's"
Hope that helps.
M
Thank you I will sort the spelling out as to photos I had to get something on there but intend to sort them out in time plus reduce the pixels.
Sorry I haven't been on much I keep getting logged out when I go and post a pic. need to get my computer looked at :cry:
Thank you again any other feed back let me know
I just had a quick look and agree with everyone else, nice and clean and quick. It would be better to have some 'action' pics.
On the spelling front I didn't find any that haven't already been picked up, I will look again later though, I am like Mark on this it is a big thing in my book that has to be right.
Good job :D
Spelling taken care off thank you, he just needs some photos
Good stuff! Keep us posted Dave about how you get on and the progress of the site!
Hi Dave
Your email is a hotmail account
Why?
To project a professional in image it is far better to have email go something@yourwebsite.
Example: info@simonssimplyamazingmagic.co.uk
Just my thoughts for you to consider.
Fuzz
Also keep the email address short, so how about; info@ssam.co.uk
Hi again
You have got Simonsamazingmagic.co.uk so use that.
Do want to upset you Graham but if you used Info@SimonsAmazingMagic.co.uk (mailto:Info@SimonsAmazingMagic.co.uk) note the use capital letters this will help your site stand in your publicity.
Fuzz
mrsite will let me change his email and I want to change it to simon@simonssimplyamazingmagic.co.uk, which I'll sort out when he gets some photos and testimonials as to an abbreviated email you only have to click on the email on his web site to send him a message and he's not good with computers so his email wont be on any cards just phone number and web site.
Hi Dave,
It's a great looking website - clean, colourful, and uncluttered, with lots of white space. Very good. I love the layout, which is very intuitive, except for the point I mentioned in my email about making the links blue and underlined.
I've sent you a detailed critique by email, so I won't repeat it here. If you designed it, it's very good.
So sorry I didn't read the whole thread before replying, though, because I see you are aware of the large pic sizes. :oops:
Cheers,
Kath 8-)
No problem and thank you for the feedback, I hope others will get something from this as well.
Hi
I see many good points already made. The most important for converting strangers into bookings would be the photos. These look like he's never worked. SOME action shots (however poor quality) with important content are a necessity.
I agree about the email address. Using Outlook Express is far easier to manage than Hotmail. I'd spend 30 minuets teaching him for the benefits. A Hotmail address suggests someone who may go out of business. I'd recommend a Googlemail account over that.
I do have a problem with the 'person' the copy is written in. For a service such as an emtertainer it's much warmer if the site owner speaks directly to one visitor. It helps build rapport and build credibility and trust.
The 'Home Page' is written that way but then says "Phone Simon on .... " Who is saying that?
The 'Children's Parties Page' starts with two paras OK then says:
"Simon's magic is so amazing that even teenagers are impressed. So I even perform a unique show for this age group." Who says the frist bit? Then it reverts!
The 'Close-up magic' says:
"Simon performs an amazing variety of stunning magic before your very eyes. Creating illusions with cards, coins, ropes, rings etc. to amusingly mystify all your guests.
Strolling magic, mix and mingle or moving from table to table Simon brings fun and astonishment creating memorable moments.
Simon's unique routines are refreshingly original to stimulate discussion wherever he goes".
There's that narrator again!
The final 'Fun Family Events' (which I presume are for Fun Families(!) is OK (from that POV).
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I personally dislike the visitor counter on the Home Page. What's it for?
As I looked around it went up and up so has nothing to do with Unique Visitors ... it's a false count anyway. And IF a visitor thinks the number low .. it'll go against him. I'd get rid of it.
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I think the photo with the colored squares on /page2 (I agree with the comment about these page titles!) is far too close to the copy and needs some padding.
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For Search Engine Optimisation I would also change the Title Tags. There's no need to repeat the URL each time, and you can (and should) use this fro more keywords to do with that page topic. It's this that will be displayed in Blue on the top of the SE Results and key to getting clicks.
So too is the copy in the Description Tag which some SEs use for the Results listing. Other's extract from the site content, so the first paragraph is vital too.
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What appears to be a HUGE ommission is any mention of where he is and works!
I realise that locals would recognise the phone number code, but that doesn't help Google, Yahoo! or MSN. People may put in "Party Magician" or "Children's Party Entertainment" but I suspect this site wouldn't show at all (as it doesn't have either content or optimization for that) but at least it should show reasonably high for a more specific search ie "Childrens Entertainment Bath". But it won't unless the terms he wants to be found for are placed in all the key areas of the site!
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Finally (although there is lots more) ... the photos.
Apart from the content ... the picture file name and Image Tags have not been used to any advantage or at all. The SEs cannot see images.... and reads the above to know what they are and if it supports the theme of the site. These get Nil Points. A photo called PIC1A means nothing. They should be renamed using the KeyWords you choose to optimize for. So something like SomonsMagicSquareFun.jpeg or TheRingsOfMystery.gif or PartyFavouriteMagicTrick.jpeg. Similarly, you haven't used the Images Tags at all and these can be even longer and an opportinuty to get some content in that is relevant to the page topic.
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All for now ..... good luck developing the site ....
John
LOL, thank you John, some very good point's made when he gets some action photos and more testimonials done I will sort out changes. The one I kick myself over most is where he entertains that should of been obvious... still hopefully this will help others as well to develop their sites.
Thank you. I will keep you informed.